An hour into our first date you suddenly revealed your mother died choking on peanuts.
I whispered, "my father was choked to death by a
drug-dealer," and thought, I found you. At last.
I write non-fiction or creative non-fiction but I rarely write fiction. It's just so hard. However, the 33 word love story challenge at Trifecta just seemed like too much fun not to try. Click above and check out the other entries. Or try it.
I write non-fiction or creative non-fiction but I rarely write fiction. It's just so hard. However, the 33 word love story challenge at Trifecta just seemed like too much fun not to try. Click above and check out the other entries. Or try it.
Now I want to know the rest of the story! That's awesome DB.
ReplyDeleteThat's a really cool idea. And well done on your story.
ReplyDeleteI guess I can give it a shot:
The whip cracked again. This time the welt on his back opened up. He held back the safety word until the sixth whip. She whipped her love into him.
Maybe it's because I watched the movie Secretary right before reading this.
Hmmm... Tempting...
ReplyDeletecool story...might go check out the others
ReplyDeleteWho do you want to play you in the movie?
ReplyDeletewo - this could go a couple of ways, eh? Welcome to the challenge!
ReplyDeleteain't love grand?
ReplyDelete@barbara That's what I was going for. So glad that somehow got through my clunky prose.
ReplyDeleteHow romantic...
ReplyDeleteI really like it.. good one Dbs!
Dark
ReplyDeleteChills ... well played!
ReplyDelete#thingsthatareawesome
ReplyDeleteYikes...not exactly up on my list of "perfect first dates" but there you go. :)
ReplyDeleteI don't care about the other entries. This is the winner!
ReplyDeleteWelcome to the challenge, dbs! This is a clever response to the prompt, and very different to the other stories. Hopefully we'll see more of your creativity in our weekday prompt on Monday...
ReplyDeleteSharing in my FB page in 3, 2, 1 . . . Too good not to share.
ReplyDeleteYou are my hero.
ReplyDeleteI'm swooning.
Absolutely titilating; it really does make me want to read more!
ReplyDeleteI think it would be amazing to be able to write !!
ReplyDeleteyou do such a good job
lucky you..such talent.
Such a different take! I like the, what, irony? darkness? twisted? all of the above. I like it :)
ReplyDeleteI'm totally intimidated by your brilliance but here goes:
ReplyDelete"Navigating by instinct alone, it was inevitable we would collide. His tussled hair obscured his features, but his effortless slouch spoke volumes. He proceeded unfazed, but I knew he was texting about me."
Definitely harder than it looks. Anyway, I'm glad I found your blog. The Defiant Marshmallow put me on to it.
Thanks so much for taking me to .trifectawritingchallenge.com. will try my best to write a letter in 33 words!@boseCV Template Word
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